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They just threw in a completely random character?

Anybody going to post a plot sypnosis of how their ideas of how the finale should've been.

Guys you are forgetting a very important part of the Enterprise series.

The characters have to find some way to get into their underwear.

Teaos wrote:Guys you are forgetting a very important part of the Enterprise series.

The characters have to find some way to get into their underwear.

I'm sure it's easy enough to think up a half-baked reason for why they'd need to go to the decon chamber. Hell, every time they went there the reason was always convtrived.

Enterpirse was NEVER contrived!!!!

Every time they went into the decon room was VITAL to the episode.

Vital to their idea of what created their ratings, maybe. That happened before in Trek (and surprise, surprise! the only other episode to really go after ratings [to the point that you could tell they were and it interfered with the philosophy or main idea] got canceled, too!)

Maybe tonight I'll write up an outline for my final episode idea. I'll put it up if A) I get it done, and B) if you are all really nice.

Don't say I didn't warn you!

Re-imagined "These are the Voyages"

It is 2245, and the Federation is about to celebrate the launch of the
Enterprise, NCC-1701. In attendance are ex-President Jonathan Archer,
Admiral Travis Mayweather, Professor Hoshi Sato, and Ambassador T'Pol
of Vulcan. The audience does not yet know the reason for the gathering,
only seeing the three at dinner in Archer's home (as he is quite ill),
speaking of old times. Mayweather says something about how the captain
(April) will be quoting Archer at the ceremony, and Archer replies with
"Oh God, not again! I never could get that to sound right!" (this is the first
mention of Archer's speech). Hoshi reminds them they didn't exactly have
time to work on it.

We flash back to the period immediately before the founding ceremony of
the Federation, where Archer is diligently working on the speech aboard a
clearly battle-scarred Enterprise. The once clean bridge has dozens of
added on panels, consoles, and systems reflecting the rapid pace of
technology (and refits) in the Romulan War. The ship is returning to Earth
to participate in the ceremony and then be drydocked as a surplus
starship. Equipment is lying everywhere, but work is efficient. The mood
aboard is light, with many crewmen reflecting on their decade of front-line
service. Suddenly they receive a distress signal from a diplomatic
transport also en-route to Earth.


Rushing to investigate, the Enterprise finds only two Andorian survivors in
an escape pod, Jhamel and her daughter Talla, barely alive. On
awakening they are pleased to see Phlox, but when the humans approach
both react with terror.

Back in the present, the four retire to Archer's sitting area after dinner.
Archer wonders aloud how humans could have been so opposed to what
they were trying to do "back then", and wonders what some of them
might think now. The door chimes, and T'Pol's assistant summons her to a
late session of negotiations. As she leaves, Archer seems perturbed.
When questioned, he says "It's nothing. I just wonder how many times
we'll see each other again." On that note, the rest of the visitors leave
after a time.

Back in 2161, Phlox and T'Pol manage to coax the patients to tell their
story, of how they were brutally attacked by humans, and their entire
crew killed except for them. The description becomes graphic, but
suddenly Archer receives a call from the bridge. Shran has arrived in
his own transport, and demands to know what has happened. Normally
hot-headed, Shran, perhaps due to his relationship with Archer, believes
the story that Enterprise was not involved, but demands that Archer find
out who committed the crime. Just then, both ships are attacked by an
unknown ship.

In the present, T'Pol has sensed something very wrong, and after the
meeting stops by Starfleet Medical. The doctors there tell her that Archer
has only a few weeks to live at most, provided he move to the hospital
the next day. T'Pol tells them that, in her opinion, Archer should be left to
spend his last days as he pleases, and asks for something to help him be
mobile for the next few days, telling them how important the launching
has been to him.

On the Enterprise, defending both themselves and the transport is made
difficult because several of the tactical systems have been removed in
preparation for the mothballing. But with the help (and close coordination)
of Shran's ship, they are able to cripple and board the attacker. A
boarding party captures several humans, renegade Terra Prime
members, along with particularly strange technology. The humans claim
that they got it from a human arms dealer from the Centauri colony, but
Archer doesn't buy it. The crew immediately sets out tracing the materials.

In another location, figures discuss their strategy. The Enterprise finding
the wreck was part of the plan, as was Shran. But the fact that the latter
has not already made a serious incident out of the situation has
concerned them. Perhaps they underestimated Shran's character. They
decide that they must move immediately.


The morning of the ceremony, Archer's three guests arrive at his home
very early. and after giving him some medicine, take him to a waiting
shuttle.

A short time later, we see the four sitting in reserved boxes at the launch
ceremony. The new Enterprise gleams in the sun as the ship is christened.
Captain April, in his address, defers to Archer's choice nearly a century
earlier in that rather than quote him, he will re-play the opening speech at
the founding ceremony of the Federation. Archer waves it off angrily and
tries to ignore it. The memory seems very painful to him.

In 2161, T'Pol, Reed, and Trip have determined that the technology is
definitely alien, and probably Romulan. Soon, the staff pieces together the
plot. Romulan agents covertly supply and equip Terra Prime fugitives,
ensuring that they attempt to sabotage the Founding of the Federation.
They must have figured that by attacking Shran's family; the most volatile
alien known, would start an incident serious enough to derail the process.
And if in his revenge Shran destroyed the most famous starship in the
fleet and killed the primary speaker of the event, so much the better. As
they begin to compile a report, the ship is attacked again, this time by a
far more powerful enemy. Shran's ship and Enterprise are quickly
overwhelmed and attempt to flee at high warp.

Touring the new ship, Archer comments on how far technology has come,
what has changed over the years, etc. The communications officer
indicates to Hoshi that her language programs are still in use today. As
they leave the ship, they pass the transporter room, which Archer would
rather use. Mayweather leads him on, claiming he has a celebration in
mind elsewhere. They brush past a twelve-year-old boy who is stunned to
actually meet "Captain Archer". Surprised (mostly at not being called "Mr.
President"), he asks the boys name, learning it is Jim. Hoshi recognizes
the boy from a transport they had taken together from the Tarsus IV
colony, and is happy that they will take the same transport home,
promising that she will find him and tell him all sorts of stories. After a
handshake, they pass onward to the shuttlebay, getting into a vaguely
familiar shuttle. Archer barely notices, but makes a sharp remark about
how easily the older models are re-painted. Archer climbs into the back
and sits, reading a book. Some time later, the ship arrives in a docking
facility, and Mayweather helps everyone off the ship into the corridor.
Archer is increasingly annoyed by this, and turns to leave several times,
but T'Pol urges him on.

Back on the original Enterprise, things go from bad to worse as it is
realized that their long-range communications are jammed. Hoshi quickly
concocts a plan where the full report is copied and transmitted to Shran's
ship with their oldest systems, which have been luckily unaffected. As
soon as the transmission is complete, the ships split up. One of them has
to escape to tell the truth about the incident.

Arriving on the bridge of the ship, Archer sees the placard on the wall and
nearly collapses in emotion. He is standing on the his Enterprise after
nearly ninety years! Memories come flooding back to him, and he is
shocked that the ship even still exists. Travis states that there wasn't
much to work with, but almost fifty years ago the wreck was found in a
scrapyard, and the Starfleet Museum bought the ship for scrap value. He
adds that the ship stayed in preservation until a few years ago, when
thousands of volunteers from throughout the Federation restored her to
launch condition. The ship is revealed to be a museum, and that the
Admiral has procured it for the day as a gift for Archer. When asked
about how he never heard about the fate of his ship, Mayweather reminds
him he was "kind of busy". Archer then tells us the story of the last time
he stood there.

The ship that was chasing them was faster and far more powerful. It
became clear that the intention was to finish off Enterprise and then
destroy Shran's transport. The carnage would only add to the magnitude
of the incident. A few hits later and Reed indicates that there are no more
weapons available. Trip calls up saying that the reactor is about to
overload and destroy the ship unless they drop out of warp. Archer
formulates a desperate plan. He tells Trip to evacuate and prepare to
jettison the engineering section, timing it to detonate in the path of the
attacker. Without answering, Trip gets to work preparing the sequence. At
the last minute, he realizes that there is no way to properly time the
detonation remotely, and closes the door behind the last crewman,
remaining in the section despite Archer's calls down.

The maneuver works, but the Enterprise is hopelessly damaged, and as
Shran's ship escapes all Hoshi can do is issue a weak distress call before
they are forced to abandon ship. Even so, the attacker is almost upon
them when they are driven off by the Columbia and the Renown, a
battlecruiser of Romulan War fame.

The scene fades to Archer standing silently on the bridge, nearly in tears.
After a few moments, he thanks everyone for making the visit possible. A
minute later, they leave to go to the ceremony. Archer takes one last look
around the bridge before joining his friends. The audience is treated to a
rapid cycling of memorable moments from the series before fading out.

Some time later, and with Trip's seat hauntingly empty, Archer mounts the
dais to deliver the opening words of the founding ceremony. We hear the
same part of the speech that was played at the Enterprise's
commissioning, only this time we can hear all of it.

The camera focuses on Archer, fading to as he appears now, as he walks
towards the airlock of his ship for the last time. As he looks out the
window, the view follows his to the new Enterprise leaving dock for the
first time. The episode fades out with the "Final Frontier" monologue
performed by every captain in the series.

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Be nice...I know it is kind of cheesy, but I hope less so than the original ep!!!

I would have removed the contrived episode Daedalus giving enough room for a two part series finale. Assuming I am to follow the same rough plot it would go something like this.

STAR TREK: ENTERPRISE
4x21 - 4x22
THESE ARE THE VOYAGES...

Previously on STAR TREK: ENTERPRISE (Archer's Voice). We see a montage of clips from the first four seasons of the show as well as some newly filmed footage of the Earth-Romulan War. The montage is about 2-3 minutes in length and the clips get faster as they go on. This is done similar in style to the Previously on from Buffy's 'The Gift'.

The episode begins on the NX-01 in the year 2161. The Earth-Romulan War is officially over. The peace treaty has just been signed. In 3 weeks, the Federation Charter will be signed on Earth with Commodore Jonathan Archer as a signer and the keynote speaker. The hope is this alliance will be stronger than the failed Coalition of Planets.

However one Romulan Commander and his small fleet of 5 Romulan Warships continue to attack and destroy Earth forces. Defying orders, he pledges to continue the war. On the NX-01, Commodore Archer receives orders from Admiral Douglas to find and reason with or if necessary destroy this Romulan fleet. He is ordered to take command of a taskforce of 5 other Earth ships to assist Enterprise in this mission. We pan around to Reveal Captain William T. Riker observing this conversation with the fleet in observer mode.

*FADE TO CREDITS*

We open with a CGI of the USS Titan in spacedock. The year is 2380. Captain Riker has just taken command of the USS Titan. The Titan's first mission is to go to Romulus with a taskforce to begin peace talks. With the ship's launch delayed several days, Riker is looking for insight into the Romulans and at Commander Troi's suggestion has been looking back upon a historical recreation of the NX-01's final mission in 2161.

Troi and Riker share a conversation in the Titan's mess hall which is a redress of the 1701-E's dining area seen in a Nemesis deleted scene. Their conversation more or less goes the same as in the aired TATV. The two then proceed to walk through the Titan's corridors like in the episode where Troi suggests Riker skip forward a few days to when the Task force is about to make contact with the Romulan Fleet.

We see the fleet of 6 Earth ships flying in formation at warp speed. Some of them obviously have a bit of battle damage left from the war. We then zoom in onto the NX-01 and into the bridge without cutting. We can see that the bridge is more or less as seen in 'Terra Prime'. The uniforms, however are modified as in the aired TATV. There is also an addition of a phase pistol attached to every crew member. Malcolm and Hoshi are sporting Commander Rank pips, while Travis has the rank of Lieutenant. T'Pol announces they are 60 seconds away from the Romulan fleet. Sensors show an Andorian freighter under attack. The crew is shocked as the Romulans had not attacked the Andorians since the incident with the drone ship. Hoshi hails the Romulan ships ordering them to break away from their attack as a peace treaty has been signed. The only response is the destruction of the Andorian freighter.

The fleet drops out of warp right on top of the Romulans as a battle commences. The two fleets are pretty evenly matched but the damage some of the Starfleet ships have sustained give the Romulans an upper hand. One of the Neptune Class ships is torn to pieces. A huge chunk of the vessel flies into the NX-01 causing heavy damage. The battle continues for a short before Archer orders a withdrawal. At the end of the battle one Romulan ship has been destroyed while two Earth ships have been lost and the Enterprise has sustained heavy damage.

We cut to General Shran beaming aboard the Enterprise. He assures Archer that the Romulan fleet will be obliterated. The two devise a plan to lure the Romulans into an ambush. Enterprise will be a decoy as a combined fleet of 3 Earth ships and 3 Andorian ships wait nearby in a nebula.

On the Titan, Riker is in the briefing room as Troi walks in. Riker is viewing personal files of some of the dead from the Enterprise-E from Nemesis. The impact of 71 of his shipmates dying in that battle still doesn't bother him as much as Data's death. The two talk for a minute before Riker and Troi go to the holodeck as in the aired episode. We have the Trip/Malcolm 'All Good Things' engineering scene as in the episode. Troi makes the same comment about Trip as in TATV. They roam the corridors and ship as in the episode. Then Troi leaves for a counseling session with chief engineer Commander Barcley.

We cut to the NX-01 alone in orbit of a planet. Their warp engines are offline as they now must wait for the Romulans. Archer, T'Pol and Trip share a dinner together in the Captain's mess that has shades of the Trip/Archer dinner in TATV. In this scene we learn that Trip and T'Pol plan on visiting Vulcan together after the Ceremony on Earth. Archer has accepted a promotion to Admiral while Trip has been offered his own command. Trip and T'Pol's relationship never ended but actually grew stronger after Terra Prime. T'Pol reveals she will most likely remain in Starfleet. They then get a page over the ships intercom that the Romulan fleet is approaching. The three rush to their stations.

Archer and T'Pol step out of the turbolift onto the bridge as the Romulan fleet drops out of warp nearby. Archer orders a course away from the Romulans (and towards the nebula that can be seen in the distance) at maximum speed. The Romulans come into weapons range and open fire. The Human/Andorian fleet is 2 minutes away. The ship is overtaken by the Romulans as they attempt to fight the 4 Romulan ships by themselves. The scene is reminiscent of 'Azati Prime'. T'Pol announces that 15 Reman troops have boarded the ship near engineering. Archer orders security to respond as he leaves the bridge with Malcolm to join them.

A large firefight is taking place in the corridors as Archer and Malcolm enter engineering with 3 MACO's to defend the room.

The fighting can be heard getting closer as T'Pol announces over the intercom that the reinforcements have arrived. We cut to an external of the fighting in space. The Romulan fleet is being cut to pieces. We see the most heavily damaged ship make a suicide run for one of the Andorian ships. It slices into the Andorian ship and both explode.

The other 3 Romulan ships attempt to retreat but are pursued by the fleet. Another Earth ship is destroyed before the Romulans have been destroyed. The entire fleet has taken visible damage.

We cut back to engineering as the firing outside stops. The door opens as 8 Remans enter the room. Another firefight erupts. Outnumbered Trip sets his phase pistol to overload and throws it at the group of Remans. Trip notices one of the Remans aiming right at Archer Archer as he shoves Archer out of the way, taking the hit himself. Just then the phase pistol explodes Killing the remaining Remans.

Trip is rushed down to sickbay and dies similarly to the aired episode. We actually have Trip die onscreen though this time and have Archer react to it all. This is all too familiar to Riker who talks about what happened to Troi in his Ready Room. Troi reminds Riker that Trip died at the hands of a group of renegades acting on their own. The same thing happened to Data with Shinzon. Riker then realizes that he can't hate the Romulans for what happened to Data and he must do his best to make these peace talks work. Riker then remembers it's time for the launch. The two then walk out onto the bridge as we see the Titan launch into space, join formation with a group of starships and go into warp. The Riker/Troi part of the episode is done now. The text 'NX-01 Enterprise 2161' flashes onto the screen. This part of the episode is set in 2161, not 2380.

We continue with the rest of the episode more or less as aired (without any more Riker and Troi). Archer and T'Pol talk in Trip's quarters. The text 'Two Weeks Later' flashes across the screen. They arrive on Earth for the ceremony. T'Pol, Archer and Phlox have their scene as do Malcolm, Hoshi and Travis. Archer walks out and actually gives his speech on screen this time. We see many familiar faces in the audience and onstage such as Soval, Shran, Gral, T'Pau, Minister Samuels, Captain Hernandez, etc. The charter is signed and we fade out to the decommissioning of the Enterprise as it is to be made into a museum. Archer and crew pilot it into Spacedock as they pass by the new USS Daedalus, the most advanced ship ever built which will replace Enterprise as the head of the fleet. T'Pol decides to remain in Starfleet and is offered Command of the Daedalus. Hoshi retires so she can return to teaching. Malcolm becomes the Daedalus's first officer. Phlox returns home. Travis goes on to the Daedalus as well.

In the episodes final scene we see Admiral T'Pol taking care of former UFP President Jonathan Archer on his visit to the commissioning of the NCC-1701 USS Enterprise -- the first in 94 years. They reminisce as we meet Captain April and see the NCC-1701 fly off on its first five year mission. The episode ends with a montage similar to what we saw onscreen but with Kirk delivering the first part, Picard the second and Archer the third. The last shot is again of Enterprise flying into a Nebula.


Wow. I can't believe I just wrote all of that. :-\ I hope someone liked it. Yeah it could be better but I tried to keep the best of TATV and improve upon the rest. Plus I wrote it in less than 90 minutes!

DBS wrote:Don't say I didn't warn you!

Re-imagined "These are the Voyages"

*SNIP*

Be nice...I know it is kind of cheesy, but I hope less so than the original ep!!!

That was really good. I liked how you managed to interconnect the present and future while building up to Trip's death slowly.

DBS that was really good. The only thing I'm not sure about was the detachment of the engineering core. I wasn't aware Enterprise had this ability. It could shot out the core but then why would Trip need to stay.

Also I can't see anyway the Famous Enterprise would be in a scrap yard. If the Federation found it it would be honoured. If anyone else found it they would know it for what it was (a VERY famous ship) and sell it back to starfleet for a lot of money.

Apart from that the plot line is far superior to the one that was given to us.

And the last episdoe is supposed to be cheesy.

Those were rather good.
Far better than the original anyway.

Teaos wrote:DBS that was really good. The only thing I'm not sure about was the detachment of the engineering core. I wasn't aware Enterprise had this ability. It could shot out the core but then why would Trip need to stay.

Also I can't see anyway the Famous Enterprise would be in a scrap yard. If the Federation found it it would be honoured. If anyone else found it they would know it for what it was (a VERY famous ship) and sell it back to starfleet for a lot of money.

Apart from that the plot line is far superior to the one that was given to us.

And the last episdoe is supposed to be cheesy.

Thanks for the comments. I posted this, and went to bed....then I realized that oh YEAH! I wrote about MY design for Enterprise...

My idea was that she is so nearly destroyed that someone just hauls it to a scrapyard. My idea was that, yes, Enterprise was famous, but maybe after a massive war famous/honored ships are a credit a dozen...

Yeah maybe but I can't see the Defiant being thrown away after the Dominion war. Meh maybe I'm just sentamental.

On the plus side I got a really cool mental image of Trip in a space suit stradling the warp core after it was ejected. Then flipping the switch when th other ship gets close enough. Not realistic but cool none the less.

Teaos wrote:I got a really cool mental image of Trip in a space suit stradling the warp core after it was ejected. Then flipping the switch when th other ship gets close enough

To the melodic strains of "We'll Meet Again"?

Great ideas.