Ok this:
Its much easier to read. A big block of text can get hard to read. Then again thats just my opinion..."It seems that he is late." Dr. Salan remarked to Lt. Elbram, the chief nurse. "Most inappropriate to leave one's staff waiting and failing to respond to calls on the intercom. He, after all, set the time for this staff meeting. It would seem logical that he would select a time that would be the most convienient for everyone involved." Snorting with laughter, Pigrath'er, the ships medic, better known to the crew as Piggy, interjected, "If you recall, Doctor, he ordered all of us to be here at 0900 hours. He never said that he'd be here then, did he? You two haven't met the good Doctor yet, have you?"
Should look like this:
"It seems that he is late." Dr. Salan remarked to Lt. Elbram, the chief nurse.
"Most inappropriate to leave one's staff waiting and failing to respond to calls on the intercom. He, after all, set the time for this staff meeting. It would seem logical that he would select a time that would be the most convienient for everyone involved."
Snorting with laughter, Pigrath'er, the ships medic, better known to the crew as Piggy, interjected, "If you recall, Doctor, he ordered all of us to be here at 0900 hours. He never said that he'd be here then, did he? You two haven't met the good Doctor yet, have you?"